I know this should not be a main focus as of now, however, I am debating whether the title of my play will be Blade or Scars. They both fit a major point in my screenplay, so I will have that decided sooner or later.
Today, I re-wrote a huge part of my screenplay. Not huge as in length, but a very important part of the story.
This seen is a flashback between Austin and Dani. Austin feels that Dani has a serious problem that needs to be taken care of. In the process of trying to explain this, he lets something slip out that puts Dani over the edge, and a major strain on their friendship
Austin’s flashback begins. His is sitting on a spinny chair in
front of Dani’s bed, while Danny is lying on her bed. Her IPod is playing from
a speaker on her dresser which is close to the bed. The song “Fix a Heart” by
Demi Lovato just started playing. They are in the middle of a
disagreement.
Austin:
Are you sure they might not be something mentally
wrong with you Dani? Lately you have just seemed really off.
Dani:
What are you talking about? This is the first time we
have hung out in weeks.
Austin:
I mean in school.
Dani:
You barely even talk to me in school.
Austin:
Well I’ve been paying extra attention. And I talked
to Adriana and she said that her brother started out doing the same..
Dani:
Wait (Pause) You told Adriana?
Austin:
Well I..
Dani:
These past couple of weeks when you have been completely
ignoring me to be with her, you were telling her things about me?
Austin:
Dani you scared me when you told me you started
cutting.
Dani:
So rather than talking to me about it, you ignore me
for weeks and talk to a girl who you
know I don’t like and doesn’t even know me about my problems?
Austin stays completely silent
Dani:
I knew it! I knew our whole friendship was a fucking
lie! I knew that as soon as we finish talking or hanging out you go talk to
Adriana and laugh about how much of a loser I am
Austin:
Dani, you know that is not true
Dani:
Oh really? Than what would you call it?
There is a long pause
Austin:
I never meant to hurt you. You know how much I care
about you.
Dani:
Yeah yeah yeah. I’ve heard it all before. Just go home
Austin. Go home, call Adriana, and tell her about how I flipped out on you and
how you tried containing your laughter! She’s your best friend right? Go tell her
everything!
Austin:
Dani you know your my best friend don’t even talk
like that.
Dani:
You know you say a lot of things and then you go do
the exact opposite. Everyday. You say how I’m your best friend and one of your
top priorities and then I’m lucky if I get 2 words from you in school.
Austin:
Austin: (Takes a deep breath) Dani, you need to just
relax.
Dani:
Oh don’t you dare tell me to fucking relax right now.
You betrayed me. You are the one who is always telling me “Don’t tell people
your weaknesses, they will use it
against you.” Well I guess you were right. I guess you were talking about
yourself the all along.
Austin:
Okay now you are just being ridiculous!
Dani:
Am I? Am I really? I confide in this person who is
supposedly my “best friend”. I tell him everything. Things that I don’t even
want to admit to myself sometimes. And he goes and he tells the one person that
hated our friendship from the beginning everything about my problems. So they
can use it against me. Together
Austin:
You know that’s a lie! You know I would never do
that to you!
Dani:
I thought I did, but I guess I don’t really know you.
(Pause) I always knew you were two faced, but I never thought you would be that
way toward me.
Austin:
I’ve never been that way toward you.
Dani:
Right, cause I’m just supposed to believe everything
you say?
Austin:
Yes! I am your best friend!
Dani:
I’m not so sure anymore.
Austin:
How can you even say that? After everything we have
been through? Aren’t you the one who is always saying that no matter how much
someone screws up, if you love them, you can get through anything?
Dani:
Get out.
Austin:
(In disbelief) W.. what?
Dani:
Call your mom to come pick you up. I don't care just leave.
Austin:
I thought I was sleeping over?
Dani:
Yeah well things change. (Pause) Goodbye Austin.
Austin:
I’m not leaving until we…
Dani:
Just get out! (She throws a pillow at him) Now!
I think that I deserve a 100 for the work I put into my screenplay today. I was very frustrated with a situation, and I put everything I had inside into this scene. Very Cliche, I know. However, it really made me put more depth into the scene and the whole screenplay in general., and I think that the quality of it proves that I spent plenty of time perfecting the scene. I'm not saying I am done with this scene and onto the next one, however I am happy with where it is as of now. I'm not so sure if writing different parts of the screenplay and not going in order is "the right way" to be doing this, but it seems to be working for me.
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